enchanteresse ([info]enchanteresse) wrote in [info]slashababy,
2006-12-26 11:27:00
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Feedback for At the Ebb of the Tide

I wanted to thank you for that wonderful gift that I just found under the tree. The pairing made me absurdly happy, of course, but the story was also a pleasure to read. It was very soft and thoughtful, in a way, with the characters seeping into the actors and changing them. I really enjoyed (well, enjoyed might not be the right word), the way you subtly conveyed how lonely Sean was, instead of turning into just another fandom cliché. There's an art to being able to write threesome sex and you really managed to write something original, good and a little bit painful. I'm all kind of curious to know who you are now. :-)

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[info]marius2045

December 26 2006, 21:50:55 UTC 5 years ago

I just read the story written for you and it had more than one part, which made my heart jump in delight! This scentence was my favorite:

If Orlando was Sean's light, Viggo was Sean's ground; Sean always knows where he is with respect to Viggo, and he can rely on Viggo to remind him of exactly what he needs. Viggo sees Sean, but Orlando illuminates everything around him.

If I'd only read that scentence I would have known what the entire story was about! Lucky you! not that I can complain

Anonymous

December 27 2006, 01:53:32 UTC 5 years ago

But you're not complaining at all, are you? ;)

[info]marius2045

December 27 2006, 09:46:32 UTC 5 years ago

HELL NO! I loved the images the story created in my mind. I could almost hear the sound the people made outside of the closet. See Sean's face when the doorknob was turned, how he twisted and tried to hide from Viggo's knowing touch, lol.
Nope, not at all!

Anonymous

December 27 2006, 09:55:00 UTC 5 years ago

Well, that's good to know. =) I'm glad you found something in the story that touched you.

[info]marius2045

December 27 2006, 11:54:03 UTC 5 years ago

I esp. liked these two scentences:
"Christ." The word was barely audible, carried along on Sean's breath as he exhaled. *shudders* I don't know why but that was very good!

There was a burst of laughter that make Sean's cheeks burn, made him feel as if they could see though the heavy wood, see him powerless to keep his hips from pressing back into Viggo's thrusts. How kinky! :) Loved it!

Anonymous

December 27 2006, 12:35:55 UTC 5 years ago

Now I'm wondering if you have the right story!!!

[info]marius2045

December 28 2006, 11:57:41 UTC 5 years ago

Huh? Are we talking about the above mentioned story or the one written for me? Now I am confused!

Anonymous

December 28 2006, 12:03:10 UTC 5 years ago

Which were you talking about?

[info]marius2045

December 29 2006, 12:07:09 UTC 5 years ago

LOL, 'In the Closet'? I am confused but actually it is very funny.... *giggles*

Anonymous

December 29 2006, 12:10:16 UTC 5 years ago

It is a bit amusing, isn't it? But not to worry, comment fairies will make sure your compliments make it to the right place, no matter what post they're in.

[info]marius2045

December 29 2006, 13:14:13 UTC 5 years ago

Now I feel like a dork, lol!

Anonymous

December 29 2006, 13:16:38 UTC 5 years ago

Or maybe I'm the dork. Or I could just be teasing you, too. Or temporarily insane.

[info]marius2045

December 30 2006, 00:18:33 UTC 5 years ago

I plead for temporarily insane please *ggg*

Anonymous

December 30 2006, 12:20:26 UTC 5 years ago

Sounds fine to me. =)

Anonymous

December 27 2006, 01:51:15 UTC 5 years ago

Curious about me, hmm? Well, all in good time I suppose. ;)

I'm not very used to writing Sean, so I'm very glad you like his story (my Sean!muse refused to cooperate until after the Blades match was over, so it must be his story, yeah?) and that it turned out in a way that you enjoyed.
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